Jane Meloney, who had never taken her eyes off Stahr, knew it was going to be all right now. If he had really been going to abandon the picture, he wouldnt have gone at it like this. She had been in this game longer than any of them except Broaca, with whom she had had a three-day affair twenty years ago.
Stahr turned to Reinmund.
You ought to have understood from the casting, Reiny, what kind of a picture I wanted. I started marking the lines that Corliss and McKelway couldnt say and got tired of it. Remember this in the future if I order a limousine, I want that kind of car. And the fastest midget racer you ever saw wouldnt do. Now He looked around. shall we go any farther? Now that Ive told you I dont even like the kind of picture this is? Shall we go on? Weve got two weeks. At the end of that time Im going to put Corliss and McKelway into this or something else is it worth while?
Well, naturally, said Reinmund, I think it is. I feel bad about this. I should have warned Wylie. I thought he had some good ideas.
Monroes right, said Broaca bluntly. I felt this was wrong all the time, but I couldnt put my finger on it[67].
Wylie and Jane looked at him contemptuously and exchanged a glance.
Do you writers think you can get hot on it again? asked Stahr, not unkindly. Or shall I try somebody fresh?
Id like another shot[68], said Wylie.
How about you, Jane?
She nodded briefly.
What do you think of the girl? asked Stahr.
Well naturally Im prejudiced in her favor.
You better forget it, said Stahr warningly. Ten million Americans would put thumbs down on that girl if she walked on the screen. Weve got an hour and twenty-five minutes on the screen you show a woman being unfaithful to a man for one-third of that time and youve given the impression that shes one-third whore.
Is that a big proportion? asked Jane slyly, and they laughed.
It is for me, said Stahr thoughtfully, even if it wasnt for the Hays ofifce. If you want to paint a scarlet letter on her back[69], its all right, but thats another story. Not this story. This is a future wife and mother. However however
He pointed his pencil at Wylie White.
this has as much passion as that Oscar on my desk.
What the hell! said Wylie. Shes full of it. Why she goes to
Shes loose enough, said Stahr, but thats all. Theres one scene in the play better than all this you cooked up, and youve left it out. When shes trying to make the time pass by changing her watch.
It didnt seem to fit, Wylie apologized.
Now, said Stahr, Ive got about fifty ideas. Im going to call Miss Doolan. He pressed a button. And if theres anything you dont understand, speak up
Miss Doolan slid in almost imperceptibly. Pacing the floor swiftly, Stahr began. In the first place he wanted to tell them what kind of a girl she was what kind of a girl he approved of here. She was a perfect girl with a few small faults as in the play, but a perfect girl not because the public wanted her that way but because it was the kind of girl that he, Stahr, liked to see in this sort of picture. Was that clear? It was no character role. She stood for health, vitality, ambition and love. What gave the play its importance was entirely a situation in which she found herself. She became possessed of a secret that affected a great many lives. There was a right thing and a wrong thing to do at first it was not plain which was which, but when it was, she went right away and did it. That was the kind of story this was thin, clean and shining. No doubts.
She has never heard the word labor troubles, he said with a sigh. She might be living in 1929. Is it plain what kind of girl I want?
Its very plain, Monroe.
Now about the things she does, said Stahr. At all times, at all moments when she is on the screen in our sight, she wants to sleep with Ken Willard. Is that plain, Wylie?
Passionately plain.
Whatever she does, it is in place of sleeping with Ken Willard. If she walks down the street she is walking to sleep with Ken Willard, if she eats her food it is to give her strength to sleep with Ken Willard. But at no time do you give the impression that she would ever consider sleeping with Ken Willard unless they were properly sanctified[70]. Im ashamed of having to tell you these kindergarten facts, but they have somehow leaked out of the story.
He opened the script and began to go through it page by page. Miss Doolans notes would be typed in quintuplicate and given to them, but Jane Meloney made notes of her own. Broaca put his hand up to his half-closed eyes he could remember when a director was something out here, when writers were gag-men or eager and ashamed young reporters full of whiskey a director was all there was then. No supervisor no Stahr.
He started wide-awake as he heard his name.
It would be nice, John, if you could put the boy on a pointed roof and let him walk around and keep the camera on him. You might get a nice feeling not danger, not suspense, not pointing for anything a kid on the roof in the morning.
Broaca brought himself back in the room.
All right, he said, just an element of danger.
Not exactly, said Stahr. He doesnt start to fall off the roof. Break into the next scene with it.
Through the window, suggested Jane Meloney. He could climb in his sisters window.
Thats a good transition, said Stahr. Right into the diary scene.
Broaca was wide-awake now.
Ill shoot up at him[71], he said. Let him go away from the camera. Just a fixed shot from quite a distance let him go away from the camera. Dont follow him. Pick him up in a close shot and let him go away again. No attention on him except against the whole roof and the sky. He liked the shot it was a directors shot that didnt come up on every page any more. He might use a crane it would be cheaper in the end than building the roof on the ground with a process sky. That was one thing about Stahr the literal sky was the limit. He had worked with Jews too long to believe legends that they were small with money[72].
In the third sequence have him hit the priest, Stahr said.